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| The Couple prompt Mag 254 |
He swayed
into the kitchen
grabbed her
to
Dance.
Off balance
she turned
to avoid
his
Kiss.
He reeked
of alcohol
off balance
they
Danced.
She asked
herself yet again
why had she
said
Yes.
Jacqui Binford-Bell
Sad that this is true so many times. Well done.
ReplyDeleteWhat a tragic love story for one who fell out of love. Sometimes, it is like that when stories are not likely to end in happily ever after. The last verse is like a cincher here. I enjoyed it. Thanks!
ReplyDelete- ksm
They story is a familiar. I never fell out of love but I could not cope with the drink. It ultimately killed him.
DeleteOops, i'm sorry.. i've misunderstood the intention of your poem. Thank you for the clarification, it made me appreciate more this beautiful piece.
Delete- ksm
Did not mean to correct you. A poem is what the reader makes of the words written. Just wanted to say some of the most painful mistakes are with soul mates, but that is probably a novel.
DeleteOh how reality can strike after so many `yesses`… good one.
ReplyDeleteI enjoy what you captured here. There is such a universality in your words and the image. By the way, I love what your bio says about New Mexico and the Four Corners area. It is a place my son loves visiting (and there aren't many of those!)
ReplyDeleteI am posting this comment again because I am not sure if it went through the first time? If it doesn't go through this time I will just let it go...
It made it, Julie. Thank you for the extra effort. I appreciate you kind words.
DeleteYes, sadly. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThat lust for alcohol throws everything off balance :-(
ReplyDeletebeen there.....learned my lesson years ago. Excellent poem!
ReplyDeletea sad love story..x
ReplyDeletewhoa. truly a path I hadnt considered. I appreciate your experience
ReplyDeletegood imagination!
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful and heart-felt. Puts forth a completely new frame of perspective.
ReplyDeleteEloquent and sad. Beautiful writing here. :-)
ReplyDelete~Imelda