First for those of you I sucked in with my previous Magpie the link to more of The Skating Party. I have decided to post weekly episodes (let's hope weekly) to my other blog Sidetracked Charley as going back to short story writing from poetry is a sidetrack. But then going back to poetry from fiction writing was a sidetrack too.
I digress, on to this week's Magpie.
Change of Direction
Slow going
On a snow packed road
Fighting her way back home
Storm or no storm
Weary from the struggle.
Then the arrow
Suspended in the air
Before her windshield
As the sun finally broke the storm
Directing her right.
She pulled into the lane
Just to shake the fatigue
Getting out into the cold air
Feet sinking in the snow
Before Derek's house.
She had not come before
When the black wreath on the door was new
Unable to face him not returning from war
She had stayed in the city
With her memories of his life.
Now she cried
For him
Herself
And the parents
She came to bury.
Jacqui Binford-Bell 2011
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ReplyDeleteSorry to make you cry. I wrote this stream of consciousness on one cup of coffee this morning. And if it is any consultation I was crying too by the last line.
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