Sunday, January 18, 2015

The Dance

The Couple prompt Mag 254

He swayed
into the kitchen
grabbed her 
to 
Dance.

Off balance
she turned 
to avoid
his 
Kiss.

He reeked 
of alcohol 
off balance
they
Danced.

She asked
herself yet again
why had she
said
Yes.

Jacqui Binford-Bell

17 comments:

  1. Sad that this is true so many times. Well done.

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  2. What a tragic love story for one who fell out of love. Sometimes, it is like that when stories are not likely to end in happily ever after. The last verse is like a cincher here. I enjoyed it. Thanks!

    - ksm

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    1. They story is a familiar. I never fell out of love but I could not cope with the drink. It ultimately killed him.

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    2. Oops, i'm sorry.. i've misunderstood the intention of your poem. Thank you for the clarification, it made me appreciate more this beautiful piece.

      - ksm

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    3. Did not mean to correct you. A poem is what the reader makes of the words written. Just wanted to say some of the most painful mistakes are with soul mates, but that is probably a novel.

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  3. Oh how reality can strike after so many `yesses`… good one.

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  4. I enjoy what you captured here. There is such a universality in your words and the image. By the way, I love what your bio says about New Mexico and the Four Corners area. It is a place my son loves visiting (and there aren't many of those!)

    I am posting this comment again because I am not sure if it went through the first time? If it doesn't go through this time I will just let it go...

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    1. It made it, Julie. Thank you for the extra effort. I appreciate you kind words.

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  5. That lust for alcohol throws everything off balance :-(

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  6. been there.....learned my lesson years ago. Excellent poem!

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  7. whoa. truly a path I hadnt considered. I appreciate your experience

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  8. This is beautiful and heart-felt. Puts forth a completely new frame of perspective.

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  9. Eloquent and sad. Beautiful writing here. :-)


    ~Imelda

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